Talk:Mangrove whipray/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 15:58, 13 November 2011 (UTC)

I'll take this one- again, the same thing I've said before, I won't be offended if you want me to stay off your articles for a time :) J Milburn (talk) 15:58, 13 November 2011 (UTC)

• Is Trygon ponapensis worth mentioning in the prose?
  • I don't think it's particularly important. -- Yzx (talk) 19:10, 13 November 2011 (UTC)
• The description is a tad jargon-y. It's not a problem, as such, but it's something to keep an eye on.
• "By contrast, adults are generally found over sand, sand and rock rubble, or hard bottom, often in lagoons or on coral reefs.[1][2]" Could this perhaps be rephrased?
  • Rephrased a bit
• "The electroreceptive ampullae of Lorenzini of this species have a sensitivity of 4 nV/cm and an effective range of 25 cm (10 in), enabling it to locate buried prey." Is this particularly strong?
  • The source doesn't say; there hasn't been much work in this area so I don't think such comparative statements are possible yet
• "The newborns measure 14–28 cm (5.5–11 in) across, and males reach sexual maturity at 55–65 cm (22–26 in) across." Females? Do we know how long they live?
  • No information on females (in sharks and rays, female maturation size is harder to measure because it can't be assessed externally) or longevity
• There is inconsistent reference formatting- compare "Manjaji, B.M.; White, W.T.; Fahmi; Ishihara H.", "Last, P.R. and J.D. Stevens" and "Froese, Rainer, and Daniel Pauly".
  • Fixed
• File:Himantura granulata.jpg is problematic- it appears to lack evidence of permission.
  • I've taken it out; the original uploader at Commons seems to have a history of uploading pics without permission data. It's unfortunate because that was a nice image.

Generally looking very nice. I made a few small fixes and added some categories (see here). I'm sure there will be no problem promoting once these issues are resolved. J Milburn (talk) 16:27, 13 November 2011 (UTC)

Let me know of further issues. -- Yzx (talk) 19:10, 13 November 2011 (UTC)

Ok, I'm happy to promote. Good work, as ever! J Milburn (talk) 22:12, 21 November 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. -- Yzx (talk) 20:07, 22 November 2011 (UTC)